Thursday, January 10, 2013

Ode about iPad




Dear iPad,

     You are such a good cyber friend. You are really amazing, attractive, and annoying. The annoying thing is that you sometimes lag. Next time, Please don't disappoint me.

There good things too. You are very attractive. I always think about you. From now on, I hope I can spend more time with you.
Another good thing is that you are amazing. You can download games and many more. You are very smart for a small object. I still want to know more about you though.
For my conclusion, I really want to thank you for everything. Entertainment, companion, and etc. I hope we can keep our friendship strong! Also, I will never forget you. You are the best cyber friend I've ever met. Bye.



     

                                                                                         Your friend, Jaywon
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3 comments:

  1. UnknownJanuary 14, 2013 at 12:20 AM

    Jaywon,

    This is a good try at an ode. Remember an ode is poectic so you need to use personifications, and metaphors in the ode.

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  2. ChrisJanuary 15, 2013 at 3:44 AM

    Hi!
    This is a nice ode to your iPad, but seems a bit short. Try to use more descriptive language in your writing. Keep working hard~

    -Yongwook, Oh (Writing TA)

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  3. Kelly LeeJanuary 16, 2013 at 5:55 AM

    Hi Jaywon. I'm Yourim. I liked your ode's topic but I think that it was short so next time you should try making it longer and telling what you think about the Ipod more specificly.

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